Paper Title: Fabulous Dumpling
Date: 04/09/11
Editor’s Name: Dolkar Tsering
Peer
Review Worksheet
1.Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and
relevant to the topic?
relevant to the topic?
The first paragraph covers the idea what is the essay about.Yes, the first sentence is relevant to the topic.
2.What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if
possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.
The main idea of this essay was to tell how the food that we are eating has been changed over the time .No suggestion.
3.Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each
paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph
make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What
are the main conclusions?
Yes the idea of each paragraph is well explained. The main conceptsis to tell why the foods in 100 years back were tastier, healthier and fresher.Each paragraph make relevant point to the whole essay.
4.Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.
Yes the author nees to improve on grammar usage.No any awkward sentence is found
5.Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and
reference format used?
Yes,the author has clearlyidentify the sources and the reference format was quite proper.
6.What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.
Giving every details to cover the main idea of the essay is the greatest strenght of this author.
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