10 things about the final paper

1.Banning the soda9.Energy drinks vending machines in school
2.Not allowing fast food company in hospital
3.helping organic farmers.
4.banning the fast food advertisement.
5.school lunches
6.strict rules on food processing
7.better safety precautions for meat packing industries.
8.Artificial flavor
10.Stopping injecting hormones to the animals.

As obesity and diabetes are one of the most leading problem in America,Banning soda purcahse with food stamps would be very good step.This proposal would not only help the improvement of health of poor people,it would help the Government taxpayer revenue.
So banning soda purchase with food stamp would allow people to buy more fruits and vegetables which is more healthier....

300 Words Response to the Fast Food Nation and “Super-Size Me”.

 Dolkar

The chapter 2 in fast food nation book mainly focuses on how Fast Food Company has applied profitable method of advertising and its impact on children. For instance, McDonald only has spent 1.4 billion dollars on advertisement, moreover they have provided playground within the restaurant premises and to allure more children they have even provided them toys with the happy meals. Because of large advertisement from fast food Company, they have made children often recognize a brand logo before they can recognize their own name. It says how far the McDonald has gone promoting itself as a “Trusted Friend” saying they care about customers’ well being.

The movie “Super-size me” that we watched in the class was so incredible movie which successfully
proved the causes of obesity and diabetics which are the leading problems of America. The movie was mainly focused on displaying how eating fast food’s meal can lead to serious health problem. It has also brought the issue of fast food restaurant  alluring the customer to eat bigger size. Moreover the movie says how hard McDonald has made people to get away from them as they are located in almost every three blocks. The movies also mentions how fast food has become incorporated in many public schools, shopping mall and even with the hospitals.To prove how damage fast food can do to our health, the movie director Morgan Spurlock does an experiment eating McDonald’s food for a month. Before doing so he gets his health checked up and he finds himself healthy. But after 30 days he gains his weight from 185 to 210, cholesterol level goes up and total body fat increase from 11% to18%.With all these reasons, the main motivation of this movie is to tell us whether we still want to stick with fast food or stop eating it.

self review

Writer’s Name: Dolkar Tsering

Paper Title: Fabulous Dumpling

Date: 04/09/11

Editor’s Name: Dolkar Tsering

Peer
Review Worksheet

1.Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and
relevant to the topic?

The first paragraph covers the idea what is the essay about.Yes, the first sentence is       relevant to the topic.

2.What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if
possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.


The main idea of this essay was to tell how the food that we are eating has been changed over the time .No suggestion.



3.Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each
paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph
make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What
are the main conclusions?

Yes the idea of each paragraph is well explained. The main conceptsis to tell why the foods in 100 years back were tastier, healthier and fresher.Each paragraph make relevant point to the whole essay.


4.Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

Yes the author nees to improve on grammar usage.No any awkward sentence is found


5.Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and
reference format used?


Yes,the author has clearlyidentify the sources and the reference format was quite proper.

6.What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.

Giving every details to cover the main idea of the essay is the greatest strenght of this author.